What do you think of this song i wrote?

Question

Dont you ever think,
Your staying where you are.

Dont you ever blink,
and know that tomorrow isnt far.

Reality is falling apart, in this world today.
and moving is just a way of life, everyone needs a change.

Maybe the sun wont rise,
Maybe the birds dont fly,
Somehow people dont understnad,
the little things of change.
Somehow their lifes are always going to be.
not another mystery.



ok so its pretty bad but idk just some starting tips and things would help alot

Answer 1

it could be nice but right now it needs a lot of work i mean a lot belive me because i am a sonng writer and a singer and a professonal singer wouldn't want to sing that but it could be nice if you spent some time on it so just take my advice and make it longer and add a little beat!!!

Answer 2

If I heard what it appeared like then according to hazard i could desire to respond to this extra effectual, although curiously notably stable, and that i think of i could pay attention to it on events... it form of feels a touch short and could in ordinary terms be like a a million:30 and maximum songs are approximately 2:00-4:00 minutes long... even though it looks like it can be a stable music... wish I helped...

Answer 3

Sounds like you have a bleak outlook on life. Try writing about something good and positive. People don't want to be depressed and down from a song they want to be excited and uplifted.

Answer 4

pretty good. besides a few mistakes *understand

and i would fix this line... "the little things of change" to "the things that never change" or "the small degree of changing".



hope this can help~! :]

Answer 5

Its pretty good. Writing about how you feel instead of just writing would help you a little bit more and it will make progress. (:

Answer 6

It seems okay, but I'd not try to record it unless it was a novelty song.

Answer 7

I don't think is bad...to me its really good...better than the crap stars are singing about....i like it...pretty cool!

Answer 8

Not the best, but it is a start. Keep at it.

Answer 9

its not bad. im not really a song writer so i cant give you any tips sorry. just keep working on it! :)

Answer 10

It seems alright, but I don't know what you want it to sound like.

Answer 11

very cool, i wish i could write cool lyrics like that

Answer 12

thanks for showing but i haven't a clue what it means. factually, i must point out that most birds do fly.

Answer 13

its good i like it a lot

Answer 14

Get pissed and write metal songs.

Answer 15

its nice

Answer 16

its nice

Answer 17

OMG I LOVE IT!

Answer 18

i think its really good.

Answer 19

what are you saying its really good!!!!!!!!

Answer 20

i love it!! U SHOULD SING IT N PUT IT ON YOUTUBE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!